Oi... K-chan...
Mar. 18th, 2002 11:42 am![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
windandwaterAbout the beta-job you had me do...
Very good. I didn't catch any spelling or grammatical errors except for you misspelling "their" in your author's notes. Very good use of imagery and the cutting of scenes, but you might want to work on the pacing of the story a bit. Because part of it seemed to build up slow and made you anxious, and then a bunch of stuff happened really fast, and wasn't too... fulfilling. I don't know if that was the tone you were trying to convey.
Damn you for making me envious of your writing!
:::kicks her Muses:::
Very good. I didn't catch any spelling or grammatical errors except for you misspelling "their" in your author's notes. Very good use of imagery and the cutting of scenes, but you might want to work on the pacing of the story a bit. Because part of it seemed to build up slow and made you anxious, and then a bunch of stuff happened really fast, and wasn't too... fulfilling. I don't know if that was the tone you were trying to convey.
Damn you for making me envious of your writing!
:::kicks her Muses:::
